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under a blistering sun he walks wandering
     the red desert wastelands of the south
         his shoes worn thin by endless miles
clothes stained red as the blood on his hands.

                           [the blood of the damned]

one hundred screaming souls left
                                       abandoned in Hell.
their weight -heavy on burnt shoulders-
           breaks fragile human bones. and he
does not delude himself, so much, to think
that he could ever buy his way through
gates of grace and step, a sinner, into Heaven.

so he walks along these broken roads
                                  searching
for his home on Earth.

   a home he knows is out there somewhere
in soft careless laughter, and slow uncertain smiles
of flesh, and blood, and bone, and living body.

                            brother, i'll be there soon. . .
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Author's Comments

because Dean's home is wherever Sam is.

Yeah, so this is me killing to birds with one stone. (Oh my God, what a terrible thing to say. . .) A poem for you. Supernatural fanfiction for me. :D

You can read it and pretend it's not. . .you know, what it's about.

Uh, comments?

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:icongrey-skies-industry:
protip: pretending it's about iraq makes it into a stunning tribute to soldiers

but i only do that because i don't know who Sam and Dean are. :<

--
"i will remember that I do not treat a fever chart, a cancerous growth, but a sick human being..."
[modern hippocratic oath]

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:iconmello-mcqueen:
You totally don't have to pretend that hard, since I thought the same thing when I was writing it. :)

Either way though, technically it's a tribute to soldiers. ...only, you know (or I guess you don't), Sam and Dean don't fight Iraqi's in the middle of a blazing desert. Instead, they fight demons in the middle of the apocalypse. :XD:

But thank you for the favorite Indi! I'm happy you like this. ^^


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this is how the world ends.

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:iconmoretta:
*has no comment*

Well, it's a great poem. Unfortunately, I left my sense of vocabulary at home, so I dunno what else to say.
S'nice, Ash.
:icongrey-skies-industry:
Concrit: I'm not sure I like the line "souls of the damned", as it is rather cliche, and the last line seems a little out of place. I don't know why I pointed that out in my second comment instead of my first. :p

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"i will remember that I do not treat a fever chart, a cancerous growth, but a sick human being..."
[modern hippocratic oath]

:flaguk:
:iconmello-mcqueen:
...because you forgot...? :XD:

And yes, I agree. It it cliche, but unfortunately it was true. Dean tortured souls in Hell. I agree with that one too, but. . .I didn't know how to make it FIT. :shrug:


--
this is how the world ends.

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:iconmello-mcqueen:
No worries. No worries. :D

I never know what to say about peoples stuff, anyway.


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this is how the world ends.

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